Thursday, 30 July 2015

Writing - Editing

Each morning when we start our writing, we have a simple sentence and the children need to improve the vocabulary and detail within the sentence.

Today we started with: Nadija saw some flowers in the vase.

Here are two examples of how we could improve and rework this sentence:

Nadija T spied a bunch of golden orchids in the yellow chipped vase. (Wesley)

Nadija glanced at some absolutely horrific roses in a cracked and ugly vase and struggled not to choke on the stench. (Braden)

It takes time and effort to improve our writing, this is a skill the children will continue to work on.

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